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You have locked my soul away,
never to see the light of day again.
You have stole my mind,
So I never think of you  again.
You have bind my leg's together,
So I will never run away from you.
You have covered my eye's,
So i never know what your going to do.
You have never try to take my heart,
I have giving it to you,
Now I'm your's
©2005-2009 ~leon01288
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One i made when i was mad please tell me what you think

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:iconheavenly-hunter:
i find this piece very interesting really. especially the forced reality........ah, nvm. anyway, i like it, but sometimes it might be a bit too repetitive, especially if it goes on for any longer. and it might be good to put a bit more on the ending even though it is the stopper for the poem. good work anyway.
:iconleon01288:
I see what your talking about thank you for ur comment

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I thought my life was over. All that was left was to wait for the pain. Would it come fast and hit me hard? Or would it start at my feet and gradually work its way up my legs, over my body, and zero in right on my head in a brilliant, searing flash of ago
:iconpocahontas15:
Vas a tener que buscarte a alguien que traduzca lo que estoy diciendo... solo lei I'm yours, y creeme solo con ese me doy cuenta que tienes un talento increible para escribir! Ojala hablaras espaņol ..
Sigue asi...
muaxx!! :heart:

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It's win or lose.. Not how you play the game!
:iconleon01288:
O_O err i cant read that well thanks i think

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I thought my life was over. All that was left was to wait for the pain. Would it come fast and hit me hard? Or would it start at my feet and gradually work its way up my legs, over my body, and zero in right on my head in a brilliant, searing flash of ago

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